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this poem is beautiful and i agree it would stand more powerfully on its own in one language or the other. italien lends it a stronger air or romance and mystery. gorgeous!
Very pretty, but as Varr says, it's confusing. You may wish to separate the English from the Italian. Spinnekopp (sp?) does this with Afrikaans and English if you'd like an example. I'd love to read this in Italian all by itself as I think it would be a stronger poem than in English. I love so many lines here - "a breathe of life". It's really quite lovely! :)
This is confusing. I think all of us here at Spoiled Ink can speak english, and if they dont they could probably fix the language. But of what I could read, it was nice. Love and darkness was in this one, which made it pleasant.
