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Skate On Thin Ice
how fragile it looks
brittle with repetitions
hardened by skids and falls
how many jumps can this ice take?
pirouettes my body can only dream
I could defrost
melt into reflections
not only I can see
gravity has always been
kind of fascination for me
as Einstein's relativity
ballet on ice
single, double
triple axel
how do I begin to figure skate
on thin Ice
anxious to jump
at the chance
just to fall
like a child who
colors her world
snowballs of ambition
my day starts
like a charade
Prima Ballerina on stage
decisions suddenly fills my air
breathing dictates
my rhythm
split seconds of
moments,
decisions
evaporate
curtain call of joy
love affair with uncertainty
a lifetime
of possibilities
fascinated with
one audience
who now gets
to see me
as soon as I stop
he's suddenly there
just as I
figured, he stares
just when my toes,
frostbitten
my hands,
clammy and cold
i'm drenched
skidding on ice
no longer radiant
just bold
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| Thanks for your comments. I was actually inspired to write this after watching my kids(two daughters) skate over the weekend. I'm contemplating on skating myself after being inspired by them. Anyway, I did combine the physical part of it with stages of "falling in love", ouch. |
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Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-06-25 22:10
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This is an interesting piece. I felt like I was peeling back layers. I've tried different styles within the same poem--without much success--but I think it works for you here.
The subject was strange to me, though. Before this, I read a poem about summer, and ice skating is the furthest thing from my mind these days.
I especially like your last two lines. |
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Lovely write. Skilled use of an extended metaphor... unless of course you actually like to literally skate on thin ice as a hobby [extreme figure-skating - now there's an idea for the Winter Olympics], in which case it's an interesting poem about a pretty unique past-time.
Incidentally, if gravity's a subject matter that interests you, Roger McGough wrote an excellent poem called "Defying Gravity", which is well worth looking out. |
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Comment by: - 2006-06-25 21:19
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Is this supposed to be about the stages of love? That's what it seems like to me. I enjoyed this piece, keep at it.
And is gravity really fasinating? I find it painful. |
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