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Comment by: mitra - 2007-06-24 04:01
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| Great choice of words. Very strong opening that grabs the attention immediately as the topic should. This side of understanding of self that you write about is what you do best I feel. Thanks for sharing a good thing. |
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Comment by: dreamer - 2006-07-26 16:44
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| You are very eloquent. Leaving mystery and enticement in the poem. |
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Comment by: suleem - 2006-07-18 07:43
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| I guess this about two sides of being me. Ego and soul selves combining and intertwining in each momnet. |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-07-18 06:01
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Why did you use the word 'ingenious'?
Sounds like you two were meant for each other. Your answer above explains why. |
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| I like the style of this, it has a lot of solidity to it, I think it would be superb at a spoken word event. There are some really interesting, striking lines as well. But mostly I like the tone and the theme here. Could be heavier on imagery/concreteness, but I think it's great like it is. |
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