Coffee Dependance on a Monday Morning
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Coffee Dependance on a Monday Morning
Hearing those names
for the elixir of consciousness:
Cappuccino,
Skinny Latte,
Mocha,
Frappacino.
Italian eccentricities
that roll off my
tongue as
the caffeine
is pummelled
to slimy pulp
drip.
drip..
drip'¦'¦..
as it is caught
in the lisp
of my cup.
Hearing the
rustling of sugar
as it grates
against the sachet
to freefall
into the smoky syrup
It whistfully dances
onto my lips
with traces
of a salty tang as I sip...
moving on further
as it runs into the
troughs of my mouth
poking bitterness
into the periphery
of my tongue like needles...
and then'¦.
words colliding
sugar surging
as it infuses into
my veins like
a man in wanting
just waiting
for a heroin hit'¦.
Nothing much happening now'¦
Until that drug
that stalks me
goes ten rounds
with the boxed in
cerebrum
to tell me not so sweetly
WAKE UP!
Rushing rapids
as the water
of the Andean
Highlands swerves
through my capillaries
dribbling into the tributaries
to smash into the walls of my
aged liver'¦the torrent
of coffee'd waters just
ripping sediments
of my fleshy organ sending
it into a metabolic
flurry making
my blood molten
as it vents steam
to warm a cold
tired soul
on a Monday
Morning
getting
ready
for
work.
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| What I enjoy about your poetry, and this one being a perfect example, is what an effective and skilled storyteller you are. You play with words, your knowledge of the written word astounds me. This is lighthearted and funny, with your typical wit coming through. Every time I read your work I get to know Haymish a little better, and that I like. The structure is also very effective, adding to the feeling of drowsiness, what I find interesting is that coffee does not seem to have the desired effect as the poem just tapers off and does not end with a bang, as I would have expected, showing that coffee put the power back in your veins, but rather just quietly come to a close. Or perhaps it rather signifies coming full circle, tired - coffee wakes you up - rush - tiredness returns. I think I need a cup of coffee now as I think I'm just talking rubbish now. I'll post it anyway. Always fun to come enjoy your work. |
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Comment by: foxfyre - 2007-06-18 22:51
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| having been a bean slinger for several years (working the coffee shop scene you really get to see what a cult it can be) this brought a BIG grin to my face!! |
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Comment by: mitra - 2007-06-18 01:54
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| Ahh the heavenly coffee. Somehow you find a way to make it sound that much better almost like an adventure filled journey. Enjoyed reading! |
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I don't know who Tilly above is but thank you for reintroducing the word gripe...brilliant.
Mish,, this is awesome. I am right there on the coffee fix. The last stanza is great. I had a;ways wondered how it worked. Fun write. |
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"as it infuses into
my veins like
a man in wanting
just waiting
for a heroin hitâ?¦."
Like lots.
Thanks for commenting too.Always makes me smile. |
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