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Woman Or Bitch
MTV is a trash can of porn
Openly displayed in clips
naked bits,
and topless tits,
that's how you score hits
I get irritated by every brother,
that raps; 'a woman is a hooker or a slut',
who are the woman's you met?
Do you have a trauma,
did your mother hit you hard?
What happened at your start
Where did you leave your facking hart
My little brother looks at clips
All he sees are naked hips
Don't get me wrong,
I like porn!
But don't spoil your incessant body that young
Because your childhood will be forever gone
Why are you in such a rush to grow up?
It's the time for you to be a pup!
Britney Spears is 100% fake,
And this proves she is a total lake,
Because if she could really sing,
She did not need all the bling bling
and that fucking string,
Between her thing!
So, for every rapper in the house
A woman has her flaws
But a bitch is no woman
And a woman is no bitch
This is not the way to score hits
Better be a roll model for kids
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Comment by: Beast - 2007-07-27 05:28
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Hi,
I suspect that the 'errors' pointed out might be deliberate - they certainly contribute to a piece of work that excoriates trash culture and exposes its intrinsically baleful effect on youth. It really mimics rap rather well.
I like it!
Keith |
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Comment by: rjaye21 - 2007-07-19 04:39
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Hiya, nice piece...
I too think that a lot of the rap, media.music that gets peddled to us is soo fake and dangerous, children look up to this & aspire to it, which is NOT a good thing, and words like 'ho', 'bitch' are so derogatory that they should not be allowed in mainsteam songs. what happened to De la Soul or other non antagonistic styles of hiphop?
Mainstream music is soo fake it hurts & it's all a form of indoctrination & desanitisation. you're right, when a girl flashes her thong & other stuff to sell a video/song, it's obviously covering up for something that is missing in the music/lyrics...
A thought provoking piece, this is. Thanks |
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| this is awesome, I think I might show some of my friends this.. |
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| I think evedryone else already made appropriate suggestions for improving the rhythm and cleaning up spelling and grammatical errors, but I'd like to reiterate that it's an overall well-written piece and impressive considering English is not your native tongue. Ik denk niet ik een gedicht in Nederlands kon schrijven. |
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| the rhythm reminds me like a rap structure song. what I enjoy about the poem, is that the poem itself is against a raphiphop mtv commercial culture, but using a rap hip hop sort of rhythm, which is a very nice way of poetic counterattack, nice one!! |
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