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AirUnconditioned
It's hot outside
Humid also
I've got the windows opened
As wide as they go
So it's hot inside as well
Just taking a piss
Urges the sweat to seep
From the anger wrinkles
In the middle of my brow
As does typing these words
Fuck it
I'd rather suffocate
On fresh air, that
Clings to the skin
Than be numbed by
Cool air, that is
Conditioned for the masses
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| lol suits me just fine |
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Comment by: - 2006-07-22 05:36
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| A cool snippet of philosophy. Much enjoyed. |
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A nice little rolling double entendre! I read it and loved it and it made me think of a Monty Python moment
"We are all individuals!"
*crowd* "Yes we are all individuals"
*lone man* "I'm not!" |
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Comment by: nesca - 2006-07-06 22:45
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haha hah, coming from a man like myself who does not like the outdoors , i LOVE this poem, it speaks like a rock and roll rebel piece even though there isn't any mention of it on the page...it's the underlining piss-me-off atrtitude that makes it and the way the words are arranged on the page...great stuff man, alright...
see ya,
tony |
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Comment by: Manda - 2006-07-01 08:51
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| reminds me of a silly line from the movie 'Dogma'. ("No sin greater, no pleasure so sweet as central air." or something like that) sometimes we need to disconnect ourselves from the technology that CONTROLS us. you've got that here. good work. |
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