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Baxter
Baxter Thornberry
United States, CA, Stockton

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God & Me

Hey God it's me'¦.. I was sitting here thinking of all the things I have done and haven't done in my lifetime.
I haven't traveled or lived a lavish life, sometimes I was living high on the hog others I was just barely scraping by.
I haven't been a perfect person either, yes I have done things that I knew full well were evil, just plain evil.
But knowing you have done wrong and feeling horrible about it, well there is some redemption in that.
Well my friend, right now I need you and though we haven't been in contact in a while, I have things to tell you, favors to ask, favors to repay.
I hope you wont treat me like a stranger, although I haven't been to your house in a while, but you, like most of my friends are always there I just have to call and ask for help.
So right now I am calling you, please pick up the phone.
I hope you understood when you called me and I didn't pick up and wont hold a grudge.
I am calling you, please pick up the phone.
I know you hear it ringing, your always listening.
Hello God, it's me...

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skettio Comment by: skettio - 2006-07-15 09:55
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Good poem. It really flows smoothly, nothing causes the reader to stumble through. You allow the reader to step in and feel your need.
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-05 19:36
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"Hello god it's me"--a great way to end this poem. I have written a dear god poem myself, so I know what it feels to need him and ask for his help. Excellent read. **
Comment by: - 2006-06-29 09:08
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Brings a shiver in the end. Good job. I can tell a lot of thought went into this because of the easy flow and forcing the reader to find the writer's voice; I especially liked that.

Bobby
MaryannWebb Comment by: MaryannWebb - 2006-06-28 11:16
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Great free-flow of conversation - very natural. I like the way you incorporated the phone analogy. Almost a confession :)
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