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Joni Ramos
Joni Ramos
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Secret Carnelian

her auburn skin accustomed to his embrace

a primrose in the dessert

 

he traipses her soil

somewhere between

purple sky

crescent dreams

 

garnets falling gently

veiled silver lining

the other side of her

bliss

splashes of magenta

sunbursts of citrus orange

streak across rainbow prisms

moonlit madness

 

crimson stained heart

pulsates across heavens gates

 

whispers ever so silently

her name echoes

across the miles

as it russles the leaves

chimes against the wind

waking ethereal heavens

 

his secret carnelian

wild as his purple sky

forming showered quartz

reflections of love

teardrops of Citrine

 

puddles of roses

showers of gold

 


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prufrocke Comment by: prufrocke - 2007-04-07 07:19
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I really love this poem - I know the properties of the stones that you use in the poem itself - Carnelian being known primarily as the "Actors" stone among other things. Also Citrine is one of three stones that cannot carry negative energy - so the phrase "teardrops of citrine" is lovely though I would suggest changing it to "Citrine teardrops"...pure tears...it's gorgeous. Great poem.
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2007-03-24 04:40
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I am reading this early in the morning and the blast of colors that leapt from the page jolted me awake far more effectively than my cup of coffee.
stopxlightxgreen Comment by: stopxlightxgreen - 2006-07-06 09:25
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The imagery is excellent, and I love how you make a list after "somewhere between..." This poem is very unique.
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-07-05 17:32
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Absolutely beautiful, Joni! Just love the explosion of color, and sensuality...gorgeous words. Just Yummy, babe!
Manda Comment by: Manda - 2006-07-01 14:08
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this feels like first time innocent youthful love. it has an abandon to it that allows you to use such colorful detailed descriptions. interesting and, for no better word, pretty piece.

'echeos'--'echoes'
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