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mlcarter
Melvin Carter
United States, CA, San Diego

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LIQUID DREAMS

I thank God for you everyday,
Not ever wanting this passionate feeling to go away,
Christina Jones, sometimes I'm weak,
Is this a dream or reality sweet?
You make me smile,
You make me cry,
You're everything I have inside,
I pinch myself,
I'm not asleep,
It's not a dream... its reality sweet!!!

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prolificsantu Comment by: prolificsantu - 2007-04-07 00:03
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it well written poem...some people make you so confused that you cannot make head or tail of things...
MEA da POET Comment by: MEA da POET - 2007-02-13 12:07
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This was a nice drop. It's beautiful that a man can explain that he feels for someone.
MaryannWebb Comment by: MaryannWebb - 2006-06-29 23:29
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This is really nice. The only thing i would recommend is a little bit more personalization. why does Christina make you smile? what is it about her that's so special :)

I liked the 'reality sweet' bit, and the repetition you used to get back to it.
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-29 21:27
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Great little love poem. It is good to see that romance has not died. **
Comment by: - 2006-06-29 19:57
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Lol, great image in my mind! I think you need to change the title, but otherwise, thankx for the good laugh!
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