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Tantra Bensko
United States, California, San Francisco

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Bronwen, Painter of Miccasukee Street

Bronwen, Painter of Miccasukee Street

Walking in the just-thereness of afternoon,
Scrubbed out by the Tallahassee sun, past the same
Shocking banana trees that have been
The most dramatic occurances all year
Since her move from the north,
She thinks we must stop life,

Cut it into stills, so the emptiness

Between them let's each tree, each afternoon

Stand up for itself'¦.
She remembers, amazed:
It's the same thought she had when living
In a cold maplike city of friends
Pale from art.

Short palm trees fluff up
Their wings like the mockingbird
Who shadow-scares worms.
Palm shadows have grown up
And solidified as feathery trunks
They've been at it so long,
Still as deChirico's shadow.
The line of live oaks is beyond all that,
Impossibly sublime, out of their surroundings'
Flat miles of white buildings.

She is not crowded now with intense friends
Loving her for their very perverse reasons,
Adulterous people who could believe with her
The Spanish moss on the random trees
Is really a rayonist painting
By Natalia Goncharova, scissors
Of arrested motion.

The group of friends used to look
At gallery pictures in basements
For their answers'¦

They'll believe the photo she sent them
More than anything she says, as it is flat
And still.

A crowded northern thought
Of cutting life into pieces
Is not the same thought
In an emptiness between palm trees

And more palm trees.


has been published at Memphis State Review

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klemaster1964 Comment by: klemaster1964 - 2006-03-29 21:23
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the imagery was fascinating at best, I think poetry is the way you feel, and should not be judged at scale. Neither should it ever be discounted, for it is the greatness within that drives the beast.
Comment by: - 2006-03-04 14:15
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I'm sorry being a hack at poetry, I don't have the skills you have. I just don't get this at all. Other then the woman moved from up north to Florida, after that I'm lost. Could you explain this a little. I know there are all kinds of poetry, I don't know what this one is called. Nor the stuff I write myself. Could you give me some help?
quickrymer Comment by: quickrymer - 2006-02-28 02:33
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throws me completely out. I know the words are beautiful and meaningful and flow like..poetry..
How do I, a poor old boy, emulate that? A has been and want to be, with only life's teachings, and yearning to be understood, to see him on his way.
But you give me something to aim for
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2006-02-09 05:15
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"with intense friends
Loving her for their very perverse reasons" I really love these words. They remind me of too many acquaintances
flamethrower Comment by: flamethrower - 2005-10-23 13:01
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thanks so much for your words.
tantra
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