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Suffocation freezing my beats
Searching for a sign of hope, my soul bleeds
Darkened hope of life outside bars
Pleading to the mighty forces and powers
A chance back to life I crave
understanding the worth of freedom
and what i have done isn't brave
Human life so fragile so small
Everyone precious to someone if not all
How my fears pulled me under
let my virtue flow my resilience surrender
Mind blotted with perennial stains
Never to be cleansed by flow of thousand rains
Hoped chance but already too late
I give up my breathe ending my void fate
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The first stanza really sets the tone for the whole poem. The theme of hope throughout the poem is one shared by everyone, and very relatable. Good write,**
Its very good but i thought some of the rhyming was pushed. I think it doesnt need my rhyming in it to have a good feel to it. Some of the rhyming was good though. Nice work.
Sarah
