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Look Again
Perspective.
How mortal thoughts achieve
Near divinity in scope and power.
With it one can transform
Tragedy into opportunity,
Pain into wisdom,
Errors of judgment into
Better ways to cope.
God-like in its awesome
Transformational adeptness
Perspective takes that
Acidic person or event
That so abused our life
Or crushed our hope
And with an arcane shift
Of angles and observations
Reveals the hidden catalyst
For opportunity and change.
Create reality through
Cognogenesis.
Observe what happens
From outside yourself.
The slow motion replay detached
From personal emotion
Will reveal that subtle clue
That opens a door
You didn't even know
You had been waiting for
All your life.
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Nice, strong message of utilizing misfortune into something positive and just, reflecting on one's self not to be misguided by the ardent strife of dealing with life's battles.
God-like in its awesome
Transformational adeptness
Perspective takes that
Acidic person or event
That so abused our life
Or crushed our hope
And with an arcane shift
Of angles and observations
Reveals the hidden catalyst
For opportunity and change.
Create reality through
Cognogenesis.
Love this stanza. Powerful within itself. Great writing! |
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I love this stuff, I can't even tell you how "easy" it is for me to read; it's quite up my alley, being a trauma therapist and daughter of a physicist. Paradigm shifts, perspective, and our ultimate power -indeed Godliness- to expand our awareness... yessss!!
The reference to the open door reminds me of the famous quote by Joseph Campbell:
When you follow your bliss... doors will open where you would not have thought there would be doors, and where there wouldn't be a door for anyone else.
One comment to the structure: The stanzas are nice. I think the ending could actually be "... You had been waiting for/All your life." Packs a punch, a little romantic, too. The last line "Perspective etc..." feels like an epilogue, the life-goes-on cut after the credits have rolled. Maybe you can add an empty line before that last sentence. |
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| good comments all, I have revised the piece and corrected my typo :D |
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Comment by: nesca - 2006-07-06 22:04
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very beautiful work paesano, you've got your own voice, elegant, intelligent and emotional, want more more more...see ya around man...havent' quite recovered from canada day yet, you?
ciao,
tony |
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Comment by: fredav - 2006-07-06 19:02
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You write with such divinity. This piece is transcendental, spiritual at best, and on anothe rlevel of understanding. But I have to agree with Manda..separate them into stanzas or separate a line or two like
And with an arcane shift
and also the two lines Manda suggested. It will add more depth and power to your poem. Well done, Daniele. |
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