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lisalatourette
Lisa LaTourette
United States

My Bookshop
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warning for Mr. Smith

for you
that girl became everything
you could have wanted
and more than you ever deserved
an angel bruised
in the face of your filthy smile;

it was summer,
you drove with the windows
rolled down,
and the wind tossed her hair
when she bent to light
a cigarette, her eyes on you,
lit up with the green glow
of the dashboard
and you saw the broken parts,
her aloneness like a fractured limb
under your x-ray gaze;
your obvious lies, the cracks
in your stories bigger than the ones
covering your dishwasher hands, ok, so
you've always blended in
with your last name and your
bone-dead eyes,
and I know why you don't wish
to be remembered;

maybe even she's forgotten you
but I haven't.

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cbmckusick Comment by: cbmckusick - 2006-12-06 20:27
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The voice is in the "ok" and the fluid turn from fractures to cracks to cracks, a moment unwitnessed but told with a flat all-seeing slant of un-self-righteous scorn.
LucyB Comment by: LucyB - 2006-01-24 14:26
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Again such powerful words painted with ease from a palette of conviction. I could almost feel his breath ! Great write.
Regards, Lucy
denisedee Comment by: denisedee - 2006-01-09 06:22
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i can see that day as if i were there. very cinematic. am going to go and read more of your work.
howl1940 Comment by: howl1940 - 2005-12-21 07:29
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continually impressed by your style, you have found a real voice for your work - the holy grail of all young writers. Your subject matter seems to usually be things that I find are interesting topics for poets to tackle; that is those small moments that shape us, the seeming fleeting glances that create a personality. I think you could safely say that I am a fan of your work.

Gary Raymond
Comment by: - 2005-10-25 12:50
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I felt the "slime" factor on my skin....raw....a real sensation!
Great poem, Lisa.....
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