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lisalatourette
Lisa LaTourette
United States

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that night on Beacon Hill

the moon hums inside
its cold shell,
stars like a diamond necklace
pulled apart & tossed into
the night sky
by some haphazard skeleton hand;

swimming in the rich inky dark
intoxicated
i feel the urge to press my tongue
against the back of your neck
somehow already knowing
the lemon salt taste of your skin;
instead i dip my tongue
into the sweet bubbles of our
stolen champagne
(taken from your father's liquor cabinet)
to drown the vibrant passion
that plagues me,
that musky wood smell
that seduces whatever surrounds you;

i am careful to hold myself back,
staying inside,
that fear of being broken
when the trumpets fade.

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cbmckusick Comment by: cbmckusick - 2006-12-06 20:18
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Oh, the last stanza is one of those turns that bring me back to the beginning again, to shine a light in anew. And the hard is stirred in with the murkily beautiful in that first stanza, irresistible and sharp.
SFNovelwriter Comment by: SFNovelwriter - 2006-03-05 17:19
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Very very good the only thing I would change is in the first stanza I'd change skeleton to skeletal hand
mickeyp Comment by: mickeyp Online- 2006-01-24 14:56
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The final four lines are a masterpiece. Well done.
LucyB Comment by: LucyB - 2006-01-24 14:23
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Wonderfully worded. Ireally like reading other peoples work, it is so inspiring - and the last 2 lines! inspired!
Regards, Lucy
omriss Comment by: omriss - 2006-01-22 07:15
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i liked it as well. "stars like a diamond necklace pulled apart and tossed into the night sky". that is my favorite line.
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