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billectric
Bill Ectric
United States, FL, Jacksonville

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My Summer Twin

I was born in June.
I soared through valiant summers
In slow-motion leaps & bounds;
The big, happy sun ball rolled
up, down & around me
Like the science teacher's shiny mobile.

My Gemini twin
Had lustrous hair that bounced
with each sea-saw lift and dive.
Far as could be from winter,
She held my hand when, one time,
A bee sting introduced us to horror.

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PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-09 16:08
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A light lyrical posey of a childhood. I like how you describe the bee sting as a sort of loss of innocense and introduction to life.**
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-07-09 13:23
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This is a happy poem full of sunshine and bright remembered items. Loved the way you put it together. A child's view, as Kathy says, from within an adult's mind.
Comment by: - 2006-07-09 06:12
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This is wonderfull. I espescially like the mobile image and the first stanza description of the sun as ball. Its brightly child-like while the reader percieves the adult poet crafting.
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