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idolyouth
ian galea
United Kingdom, manchester, wilmslow

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I hate You

Cowardice is shameful
A liars trait.
Where is the honour of a thief.

The silent assassin
Moves as one with a shadow
Stripping the innocent victim of her breath.

A mother
A grandmother
A wife
A mortal, harmless, defenseless woman.

What good can come of killing this woman.
Flat on her back, staring at the ceiling
Lifeless
Numb.

If your biting bullets,
Your spitting blood.
Its inexcusable.
Its unforgivable.

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kissykissy24 Comment by: kissykissy24 - 2006-09-25 03:53
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the listing technique adds depth and feeling to the words. i thought stanza 4 was a touch weaker than the others but the second stanza works very well. the shortness of the last two lines gives it definition and power and the poem stays with you. good.
LadyC Comment by: LadyC - 2006-07-11 13:06
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I like the way this is written with the repetition of the words "your" and "its". Also the use of the one word lines is clever too.
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