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Would You
If it took you a week to read a book would you read it all again?Would you listen to the story or cry over the end?Would you do that to a human and not stop and cry?Would you cry over the end of a life or think it meant nothing to you?Well what if it was you.Lying in a grave with no one to cry for you.Lying and staring at the sky thinking of life and what you did.Would you go back in time and do it again?Or would GOD forgive you for your sins?
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Comment by: Renatta - 2008-02-28 09:04
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| personally, i dont belive in god anymore, i mean, i cant see him, he hasnt done anything that i know of, and the bible is just that, a story book, i wrote this after my papa died, and back then i belived in that god you are all talking about |
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Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-16 20:08
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You say the word God, and some people lose it. Anyway...I liked how this ended with two choices. It makes the reader contemplate the answer.
I thought it was well written, and liked the theme. The only thing I had trouble with was the lack of spacing. I know that this is how some people write, and in my opinion it is the writers choice, it just makes it easier to read.** |
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| um...did you make the form this way on purpose? well, i thought it was good and i really liked your ending. i personaly DON'T have a problem with people spreading gospel because i think it's really brave of them to do it and it's not an easy task to do. keep up the good work! |
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Comment by: Renatta - 2006-07-12 19:46
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| coorection it is not like that.i am not trying to afend GOD.i just thought that it was a good ending to the poem.bye,the writer wrote this comment |
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| Hey, Girly! It's Bam Bam. I like the poem. Don't listen to comments that have a problem with God. That's their problem and not yours. They obviously have things in their lives and FEEL GUILTY about and that's the problem they have with God. I know (for a fact) that you have a story to tell and GOD is definately using you and will continue to use you. Don't lose your faith or insight. I just think it is awesome the insight you have at just 13 yrs old. Take my advice as far as comments that people make...if it doesn't apply..let it fly. You will come across people in your life that are just naturally mean spirited. Keep up the good work. God is Good and don't buy into anything else that doesn't line up with that. If people are getting offended at the topic of God...that has nothing to do with you...it's something between them and God. Some people are sicker than others! If people start preaching at YOU, compare it to what the Bible says (the word) and if it doesn't line up with the word...YOU just ignore them or if you know the right answer..you point that out to them. If God wanted us to have all the answers to life, he'd put us on the cross, but he didn't. We are all just trying to make it in this world the best way we can with what life has dealt us. The bible is either all truth or all a lie. Only you (and me) can answer that. Mine is that the bible is all truth. Now, if little man who wrote that comment about the sermon thing above wants to hear some preaching...I can oblidge him there. You continue on your journey and keep up the good work! XOXOXO Bam Bam |
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