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Renatta
ren simon
United States, oklahoma, blanchard

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"Open up"

"Time's up!You lose"
A voice filled the air with a thick smoke.When I woke up I was no longer me.Jane was gone.A white fog was over my eyes.I was in heaven.Suddenly I was pulled back and I saw a white room.I had realized that I had cut my wristes and fallen asleep.
"Open up"
I was weak so I covered my wristes and told them to come in.


"YOUR SUPPOSE TO BE DEAD DIE YOU THANE!!!"





"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!"


Jane died that night and she's not alive right now

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lufkinmom Comment by: lufkinmom - 2006-07-24 15:48
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I like your descriptions. My favorite line is "When I woke up I was no longer me."
Renatta Comment by: Renatta - 2006-07-13 18:42
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I wrote this as a story of me and I love it.
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