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| Thank you for the visual. |
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| This poem has a touching sense of eternity. I have to say, I think the line 'We kiss for decades', lets the rest of the piece down. |
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| We wait and We wait!!!!!!!!!!! Hum, what are we waiting for? What were you waiting for? Just a white thing? Or the snow forcefully came our way? Good poem. |
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| I really liked the lines "fragile and open / like an insect under a lens". Also "lie in a wasted heap of ash / in a plastic yellow coffin" - I pictured a burnt-out cigarette in a cheap ashtray. Not sure if that's the image you intended, but it worked for me:) |
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| I want that to happen to me..about the whole kissing part anyways. I liked this poem very much. But what exactly do you mean..if anything about "a plastic yellow coffin" I think Im missing something there. |
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