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Hollykinz
Holly Taylor
United Kingdom, Rushden, Northants

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Walking on my heart

Tears behind my glistening eyes,
When you put your arms around her,
Trying to not weep as I see you,
Smile as her glance lands on your beautiful face,
I am trying to be nice to her,
When you both talk and laugh at me,
Smiling, laughing, crying, shouting,
What's the difference?
My heart is still torn in two,
You still ignore me and walk to her,
Before you would have walked to me,
Now you're walking on my heart,
You only go to her,
To your new friends,
I guess you have grown up,
We both have,
Should I let this go?

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scotspoetryman Comment by: scotspoetryman - 2006-11-13 15:58
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Not so much the strength in adversity...but more the strength in defining the moment of maturity ...purely and simply by leaving behind of childish thoughts to the emergence of mature questioning!

loved the very nature of development in this ....good stuff!
CatmanStu Comment by: CatmanStu - 2006-08-11 22:12
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A poem that dances on the edge of self pity, and then WHAM! the ending changes the entire tone. Indulgence changes to introspection, and stagnation changes to growth.
Strength in adversity, my favourite quality. Great write.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-08-01 06:35
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Great ending. Nice to see you're keeping up the family tradition of writing dirges!
lofty Comment by: lofty - 2006-07-29 05:02
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another really emotive piece ,very well done.
Comment by: - 2006-07-22 12:55
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This poem leaves me wanting for more. I enjoy the emotion from it and the sincerity of the feelings of the writer, but I think that I would like to hear more. Then again, I am usually long winded, to a fault. I do like you work and you show real potential. Keep writing!
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