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skettio
Kimberly Rodarte
United States, PA

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Keep Pennsylvania Beautiful

You tell me Pennsylvania is ugly
because the trees won't stay green
and the snow covers everything in winter.

We have a house here together,
yet you say this could never be your home
because you'll always live in California.

Without Pennsylvania, I wouldn't be
since I was born and grew up
amongst the changing trees.

I still do enjoy the first snowfall
and getting cozy with a cup of hot chocolate
eventhough I feel to old to go sled riding.

Maybe I was just so barren for so long
that I became one of the deciduous trees
and looked dead to everyone.

Since I found you I have been able to find my warmth,
I have always had it inside
I was just afraid to let myself thaw.

I agree,
there's nothing like looking up at the Redwoods
and imaging yourself tall enough to reach the top.

I like driving along the rocky coast and just staring
at the way the ocean waves dance through the rocks
and I could hunt for seashells all day.

I would miss it here,
where there are four distinct seasons
and sometimes daffodils have to bloom in the snow.

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greensburgzine Comment by: greensburgzine - 2006-11-24 15:50
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I like this poem a lot, especially since I live in Pennsylvania. I would miss the seasons, too. I would recommend a comma after "I wouldn't be". When I read this initially, I thought "I wouldn't be what?" and I had to reread that stanza. A comma would clear that right up.
suleem Comment by: suleem - 2006-07-16 15:18
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great write. I am moving home to Vancouver Island in a few weeks after living in MIchigan for 5 years. I can relate
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-16 11:02
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This poem really hit home (pun intended). I lived most of my life in Colorado, and now I live in Miami. I hate Miami, and long for the 4 seasons, amoung many other things of my true home, Colorado.

I really like how in the 6th stanza you realize you have always had that warmth inside you, you just had to dig deep to find it.

A very lovely write.**
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