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The Strange Garden
The Strange Garden
(For Bill)
Some seeds fall into the strange garden.
Not all seeds will grow into orchids that blossom in the pale moonlight.
Many will form weeds and those that don't grow out
Grow down.
There are those that become ivy that consume those of us that
Were born of wine.
The bitterness that you have planted has grown deeper
And larger than the sum of its parts
With its vines tightening around your heart stem.
From this soil,
These weeds bear bitter fruit of losing with no strings attached.
What remains as your head lies in this furrow ground are dreams that
flowers and smiles sardonically.
These dreams have thorns that cut deeper then the roots tightening around what lies below.
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Comment by: jonny - 2007-04-23 12:43
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This tells a vry direct, autobigraphical story?, with the grace and flow of good poetry.
"There are those that become ivy that consume those of us that
Were born of wine."
That line is beautiful, probably the line most left to intrpretation, just enough to balance the rest of this which seems pretty straight forward to me. I'm gonna read this some more. |
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Comment by: - 2006-12-22 12:11
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a few minor typos, but i liked the authority.
"larger than the sum" . . . i have a story posted, entitled GREATER THAN THE SUM. things in context are larger than alone for sure. |
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Comment by: - 2006-11-02 18:32
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Since this poem was written (For Bill) and not for me I won't struggle to find the hidden meaning below. It was meant for one and that one knows where the meaning comes from. I enjoyed the repeated use of 'those' in the first half and then 'these' and 'your' in the second half.
Its as if in the beginning your are describing to your friend whats there and what it looks like and the natural consequences and rewards of "those" things.
Then you take him there amongst "these" things and you let him know that "these" are "yours" (his) a product of him. His responsibility
they belong to him and anything he does not like he can change.
I really think in so few words you said a lot.
Best Wishes, Jenn Pinick |
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