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a very strong difference of opinion
atmosphere is thick tonight, and silent.
vice-grip presence
is oddly comforting.
my exhaled smoke
loiters before me.
suspended, paused in time
like a friendly ghost
waiting for something'¦
but i am not waiting
for anything.
i expect nothing.
and i want
even less.
i long
for
Absence.
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Comment by: - 2006-08-24 06:28
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I felt a sadness reading this but not at living but at wanting to be left alone for some time to think and not deal with the things around him for a little while. Maggie May is right. I like the look of how you format this to add to these feelings. Teri has told me you are a wonderful poet. I see now how she is right.
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Comment by: roy - 2006-08-07 06:31
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| You took the words from my mouth, Acra, this is so real, i feel the smoke, the noise, and the pleassure of it..your last line, blows me away..unexpected, and brilliant, I wish I wrote this poem myself/... |
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| i like the surreal moodiness in this. "vice-grip presence" is probably my favorite line from it. nice job here man. |
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| A brilliant piece Jay, of which I think deals with going against the conforms of having to live with a torrent of noise and expectations. There is a lovely simplicity about this piece and no doubt simplicity is what the poet wants to the point of being absent (taking a breather in other words). A great piece as you hold you quil again! |
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| Very deep Jay. The dichotomy of absence is really being present in the moment. Aw heck, just my own mindful interpretation..what do I know. Bookshelved! |
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