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SnagglePuss3749
Sarah M
United States, MI, Sodus

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Comparison

Spring is like an automobile that has had a long rest
For getting both started can be quite a test.

The engine, it groans and then it creaks.
The temperature spikes, and then it peaks.

And just when we think the struggle is over,
All suddenly goes quiet, and the temps gets colder.

And you see our heads hang, but deep down inside
We know it will start, and finally with pride

As the flowers, at last, bloom golden - not brown,
We can drive off together with the sun-roof down.

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DickGentile Comment by: DickGentile - 2008-01-24 22:14
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Me and you?
Martagon Comment by: Martagon - 2007-10-21 22:18
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extremely creative, love the idea behind it.
prolificsantu Comment by: prolificsantu - 2007-04-18 08:18
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very realities....good use of simile....
xxsasha1xx Comment by: xxsasha1xx - 2007-03-25 08:57
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This was avery creative approach. The imagery, te metaphor, and the ending is great.Looking forward to reading more of your works.
nataliefernbell Comment by: nataliefernbell - 2007-02-28 11:07
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As the flowers, at last, bloom golden - not brown,
We can drive off together with the sun-roof down

this poem had a difficult time holding my attention, but this end really wrapped things up and i adored it. i'm big on imagery.
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