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jagainst
Jay Halsey
United States, Colorado, Boulder

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Fighting the Shadows

On this intoxicated night,
hazy, low and sorry.
Sorry for myself,
for you,
sorry for the world,
for all the crimes
committed against humanity
by no one in particular.
Just sorry'¦
So damn sorry.

Thinking of you
and inevitable death,
as winds rage stories
stirring up ever-present past.

Skies open mouth wide
and unleash magnificent,
furious, unapologetic rain.
Rain upon my face and feet,
popping obscene gooseflesh.
Suddenly aware of the body,
I am drenched with new life,
as the grateful, sodden grass
comes rushing up fast,
firm against my head,
pressed beneath my nose'¦

'¦Are these tears?
No, I answer myself,
propping an elbow on
silver maple's shallow roots'
just raindrops for once
mixed with mud splatter.

Bolts of lightning
shed momentary brilliance,
flashes of reality
burning away any illusions
hiding out in the shadows'¦

I have not given up
the fight.
I am just weary,
exhausted and spent
from throwing my fists
at the impression of something
that was never really there.

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citydweller Comment by: citydweller - 2007-08-06 13:23
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This seems suited for reading aloud. Thanks for sharing.
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2007-05-31 08:05
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It reads so clearly; almost like watching a movie. You got us all into the head and heart of this character. Again I guess haven't read enough and missed this. At least I found this now. ;)
metaphysicalg Comment by: metaphysicalg - 2007-05-10 22:53
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I'm usually not one for imagery but I really liked reading this poem. I couldn't stop once I started. It caught my attention right from the beginning because it was so relatable. If anything, the emotion of it carried me through it once I remembered what it felt like.
Grounded Vertigo Comment by: Grounded Vertigo - 2007-04-03 06:37
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The thing I love about your writing is the rawness it has. I find it impossible to read your pieces without feeling the same emotions of the writer. It is the sign of a great writer which I have no doubt that you are.
Scribe Comment by: Scribe - 2007-02-17 14:29
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Brilliant use of imagery. Like reading this kind of work at night with a drink in my hand. You nailed the moment, my friend.
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