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aoifemannix
Aoife Mannix
Ireland

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Respect

I wake not knowing where I am.
Outside it is raining through sunshine,
a fine mist lit by a crack in the clouds.
A black butterfly with white full moons on his wings
weaves his way through the trees.
Even now there are spirit huts,
small offerings to homeless Gods,
a sense there was someone here before.

An awareness of loss, it aches in the wood,
as the toads sing their love songs,
and the geckos go crazy for lightning.
The sky unpeeled, a flash of other maps,
here there are dragons, the edge of the world,
creatures not yet discovered.

We have to earn back our sense of wonder,
the buried treasure of all that we do not know
and cannot know. The lines we drew have ripped myths apart,
whole peoples carved in two, a cut that will not close,
the logic of blood, the great crusade.
There's nothing more dangerous
than men who think they invented the compass.

The trees have their own seasons,
they read the sky and follow different stars.
In this country, I am illiterate.
The letters will not surrender their meanings,
why should they? I have not even learnt my own language,
never mind theirs. My tongue is foreign in my mouth,
so much endless paper, whole forests of lies.
The words come pre-packaged, easy to digest,
quotations from the television. Even the rain has more to say,
it sighs under the weight of the leaves, its thunder is a warning.

I want to return to the roots of vowels,
the truth of the songs we have forgotten.
In the bones of the ocean,
there is an ancient gramophone
and its dances of salt are always the latest fashion.
I will make my own waves, drink my own tune.

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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2007-12-27 02:54
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I've travelled a lot in my life, some of it alone. Why? to answer that is one of the reasons I travel. But another reason is to be fascinated by the realisation "In this country, I am illiterate." Also every travel is really a exploration of the self, so "I have not even learnt my own language,/ never mind theirs." is a humbling realisation. Looking back I could have experienced all this staying in my home town... This the third poem of yours I've read. Again you are able to use, comfortably, another diction. This time it's more naurishing "with white full moons on his wings / weaves his way through the trees". Each of your poems came over as a unique picture with its own pallet of colours. When I look at this poem my imagination is drawn back in. It's a lovely thing. Incidentally, disrespect is the mark of an inexperienced traveller.
zayra yves Comment by: zayra yves - 2007-09-05 20:42
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This line and this stanza in particular stand out for me:

"We have to earn back our sense of wonder"

It sums up everything with so few words. This is the first poem I have read in awhile from a public forum that drew me in.
stevengodell Comment by: stevengodell - 2007-07-17 23:23
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A brilliant flash, like your lightning. Your soul was set entirely free to communicate this one. It moved me and drew me directly into its middle. I felt awe, mystery, pain and wonder as I read it--and yet an imminent hope and birth. It beckoned me--not knowing intimately the steps of the journey I was to take, yet wanting to lose myself along the way. Your gift is obvious and your soul is beautiful, Aoife. Would that we were neighbors.
mantaraytx Comment by: mantaraytx - 2007-06-21 18:06
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This has such a grand sense of being alien, of being disconcerted by things that are just barely familiar. It's a very transporting piece, very vivid in its portrayal of just how little we are in comparison to the tremendous scope and majesty of the world.
jakemac Comment by: jakemac - 2006-11-02 23:13
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dig it cat, dig it, feel the imagery permeate man, totally dig
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