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Comment by: Sophia - 2007-05-16 05:24
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| I agree the chooice of words makes this strong, and I like the short, clipped lines.The last stanza is the best for me, and I think it's interesting the way you used capital letters to start the words (apart from 'to' and 'of' etc) the way you would in a title. |
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| I second Kerosene, really cool use of words and choice of words. You get your point across in three word lines, nice job. proves that wordiness is sometimes useless. |
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You end on "complete"...nice.
It's cool how it's specific words that give the reader all the information needed, vividly, yet with subtlety.
Nice write,
john |
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| On my shelf this goes. Now that I am taking time to read your work, aside from the love letter, I REALLY LIKE THIS one. I enjoyed reading, deciphering the meaning of the words but I like the comparative similarities of the piece. Great Read ..... If only I can let my partner read this and have a clue (lol) . Love your honesty and of course the sensual touch you have in your work. I wish I can be more risque. |
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| You definately have a way with words. This poem reels you in with the rare choice of words. When I start reading it, I instantly felt that I was there, involved. Funny how words can do that to you. Of course not words alone, but the combinations of words created by a fruitful mind. And you my friend have fruit coming out the waazoo... |
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