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YeOldeFart
Dennis Newman
United States, OR, Springfield

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The Li'l Dipper (Revised)

The little creek was narrow but deep, swift and rowdy. It plunged down the mountain frothing and splashing as it crashed into boulders and fallen logs and cascaded over a wall of moss covered rocks. Along its banks sword fern, kinnikinic, salal, and huckleberry grew, nurtured by the fine mist. A wide pool formed under the falls, narrowed, then raced through the gap. The stream continued its madcap journey twisting, turning, and roaring until it disappeared into the brush and trees.

In the middle of the pool, on a water-swept rock, a pudgy black bird, flicking its stubby tail, dipped and bobbed as if curtsying to the elements. It emitted a joyous peep with each curtsy in perfect harmony with the music of the waterfall, the roar of the stream, and the wind sighing through the trees.

The little bird rejoiced in her surroundings. Weeks before she had hustled back and forth with her mate carrying bits of moss, fir needles, and twigs. They had weaved and knitted their bounty into the thick moss growing on the face of the rock wall and fashioned an ingenious almost invisible nest. The living nest, sustained by the constant mist from the waterfall, combined with the moss and created a thick, soft and warm home safe from predators.

With her head held high, the little black bird surveyed her handiwork, winked an eye, tilted her beak to the sky, and let out a beautiful inspired trill. Without warning she dived head first into the shallow pool. Underwater she stretched her wings out as if she were soaring. To the casual observer, she appeared to be flying, but in reality she was walking along the bottom of the swift stream using her strong claws to grip and her short, powerful wings as paddles.

She turned over small rocks pecking and scratching like a barnyard chicken. She shot out of the water in a burst of droplets and flew to the mossy rock wall where she clung for a moment holding a fat periwinkle in her beak. A pair of baby birds, their mouths gaping, appeared. The little mother bird offered the periwinkle to her young, then twittering like a wren, flew to another rock and lit inches above the raging current where she began dipping and peeping and flicking her pert little stub of a tail as if dancing to the rhythm of the stream.

The strange little Water Ouzel cocked her head, swelled her breast, and like a serenading minstrel, burst into a sweet song with all the trills and flourishes and notes of an accomplished flutist.

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Douglas Daech Comment by: Douglas Daech - 2008-07-13 16:21
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I like this very much. The "sighing through the trees" Phrase caught me and made me read the rest. This is a very nice reflection on the grace of nature. Your knowledge and love of it shows. The topic of the bird reminds me of the big year.
DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2008-01-09 05:41
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Wow, very good description of careful observatin! Reading the story has helped expand my vocabulary! Another Shakepeare!
Comment by: - 2007-08-27 16:17
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Very elegant, Dennis. You present nature well. Is this part of a longer work? It reads like a chapter or passage from a naturalist's journal. Good stuff.
Comment by: - 2007-08-26 18:50
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Great story. I wouldn't change a thing about it. I love animals and this was really enjoyable to me.
samodee Comment by: samodee - 2007-08-25 12:55
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Yeah, he said it. Obviously I don't have the exact words or I would have used quotation marks. I am paraphrasing. I take it to mean that sometimes Oregon writers can get so much into the description of the scenery that they forget about the story. I make a conscious effort to avoid this in the novel I'm currently writing, called Storm of the Pale Rapists, because it could be so tempting, especially when the landscape plays a central role in the story as it does in my Storm.

You do make a good point though with Kesey and Lopez, although in Sometimes a Great Notion, I did find myself speeding through the descriptions of nature to get back to the story. But I have to admit, the description does give the novel a richer texture.
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