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rjgosnall
Robin Gosnall
United Kingdom

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Recollection

I recall the yellowing day
Coming down the years
When idleness was all
And never enough for us.

Whole afternoons we rose
Cidering, barley wining,
Beering our laughter to echo
Down these years of hangovers.

I am there again,
Standing alone I stare
As a cloud falls over the moon
Before four o'clock
And the sky not yet dark.

I am weary of watching
Swift passing clouds,
The atmosphere, a smokescreen
For a world shielding itself
From a malevolent wrathful creator.

This is a cold time.
We embrace Death,
Our lips touch his
In a frigid kiss.

See, nothing of your love abides now
On my imperfect shadow.

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inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-08-19 07:18
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Very powerful start to finish. Real sense of desolation in this poem.

"Beering our laughter to echo / Down these years of hangovers" was a set of lines that especially caught my attention.
rjgosnall Comment by: rjgosnall - 2006-08-11 06:50
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Thanks Leah. This was originally two shorter poems which I interwove. The last two lines conceal the name of the girl I was writing about.
Comment by: - 2006-08-10 10:34
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Chilling and lonely are the terms that pop into my mind after reading this poem. You have painted your memories and your anguish with great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Leah
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