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Making Love
While I hold her close to me
I think, should I expose her breasts?
But then I don't
For she trusts me enough to hold her close
While I explore her mouth with my tongue
I think, should I bare her bottom?
But then I don't
For she has a tear in her eyes from my gentleness
While I fondle her breasts through her blouse
I think, Should I be inside her?
But then I am not
For they say she is very sensitive
Oh how I want to make love with her
And how I want to care for her
To show her how I feel
And to make her feel like a queen
But I can't, I just can't
For I love her
And she trusts me
So I cannot show her how much I love her
Roy Weltman
17th August, 2006
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| I understood and recognized this immediately after I had read it. Treading a fine line with the expression of love and want - Desire. This is one incredible piece and an instant favorite with me. |
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Comment by: ATF - 2008-02-14 21:07
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| I thought this was a great poem from a man’s point of view. Hatchzel – I think that more women should read this as well. As for the guys – you either get it or you don’t. If you get it then this isn’t telling you anything that you didn’t already know, it just says it more eloquently. If you don’t get it, then you never will. The poem is a poignant look at the inner struggle us guys feel over our desire to express our love and affection the best way we know how, and not have her feel that we are taking when all we want to do is give. Or should I just speak for myself? It becomes an art when you can tell what to do and when to do it. Or better yet, when not to do it. The poem captures the essence of the art of making love. Well done, Mr. Weltman. |
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Comment by: Rookie - 2007-12-21 19:19
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L enjoyed this poem
I felt that the narrator though wanting to show her how much he wants her, he is also aware of her fears. Whether it was from a past relationship or something else. I feel that shows love more. He will wait, he will know when the time is right. |
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Comment by: tcbswan - 2007-07-15 10:33
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beautiful poem--the inner struggle of expressing love--walking the fine line between desire and affection, between passion and sensitivit. intimate and revealing. nice.
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| sensual and sweet. This is wonderful writing.I really enjoyed reading your poem. Keep up the good wrok. Good Luck in all you do. |
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