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shifting episodes
when you're a child
everything seems
unreachable
adults tend to forget
their childhood
and no one understands you
your imaginary friend
is backing up
when you need him the most
and there's no way
to be heard -
too much noise
when you're a teen
you feel everything is
possible
all you hear is
drugs sex and
rock 'n' roll
life seems a rollercoaster
and you want
to ride it
if something new is
on the market
you have to buy it
when you're an adult
all seems
complicated
failures
successes
treasured or hated
all comes
down to stress
make more money
take care of kids
there's no way
back
when you're old
more and more wrinkles
appear on your face
you look in the mirror
and you can no longer
remember those days
the spirit lives on
but your body
doesn't cooperates
you clear your conscience
hoping you'll earn
that heavenly place
age - just a shifting number
age - just a sudden regression
age - an unknown cycle
you - a naïve living thing
you - destiny's glee
you - a broken link to
yesterday ' a mistake
today ' a new echo
tomorrow ' the end
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| Oh my, I wasn't offended - not at all! Now that you explain the P.O.V. I see where you are coming from. And you are exactly right. Thanks for responding - I'll be back to enjoy more of your work and I hope you will come and read mine! Darra :-) |
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Hi, thank you all for your comment... Sorry if you felt offended by this poem, I realize the 4th stanza is a bit harsh; it wasn't my intention. I agree, there are people (thank God) who even having a kind of age are still feeling young, I was referring mostly to another perception (younger) people might have. Age is just a shifting number, as my poem says, I think, as Robert said, in our heart, we can still be kids, and after all, people never change.
Thanks again, Timi |
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| I like this poem very much but I agree with another comment about your references to age. You are so very young yet that you may not realize how the summation of your life and the achievements and tears and joys and heartaches all add up to a life that is uniquely individual. Most of us do look in the mirror and remember those days! However, you do clearly understand and capture the seasons of life that apply to us all. Lovely writing! Darra |
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Comment by: Cherley - 2006-09-17 21:04
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| This was interesting, but even old people feel young, it's just when you look in the mirror that you are schocked. Just a couple of plurals where I believe should not be--all comes and doesn't cooperate. Nice cycle of life. |
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Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-09-16 22:20
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| I love this. You summarized life's phases so nicely. Except you made me feel old. It goes so quickly. Great write. |
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