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Remnants (with additions...)
Open ended questions, wonders abound
Ever seeking the primordial mound
But what was once lost may never be found
Here is my heart, broken and scattered
Upon this plate on which I've gathered
All the remnants of my heart shattered
For what is the true measure of joy?
Where all circumstance is from choice
Should we be silent, or use our voice
I'm finally giving back to You
What was rightfully Yours in truth
Floating again in love's ocean blue
To listen to the wisdom of those who know
Learning, their knowledge untold
A deep desire, a yearning to grow
Shoulders' relief from the world's weight
To let it all go, for it is never too late
Facing with hope what was a doomed fate
The script of life on the course of our time
Defeating death, grasping for eternal life
Living forever in the presence of grace divine
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Comment by: Teri - 2006-08-27 20:22
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| I was threatened with the Spanish Inquisition if I didn't read this PRONTO. Wow, Robert! Now THIS is a poem full of wonder, hope, amazing imagery, fantastic emotional expression, spiritual thought, and lots more I could gush right now. I love how the rhymes are so natural and not forced. E is right; it reads like a prayer. Bookshelved for future inspiration. Thank you for this !!! MWWWWWWWWWWAHHH! :) Love, T. xox |
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Comment by: - 2006-08-27 20:08
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| Yvy is right. This is a poem about hope and your relationship to what you find inspiring and full of love. This is a poem I can read over and over like a prayer. It is wonderful work, Robert. Dios te dota del talento y muchas gracias por compartir tu amor con nosotros. -E- |
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| I agree with Yvy, this is hope for sure. The first stanza shows your vulnerability, your soul, your broken heart. I can picture you standing there, holding the plate with such care. You don't want to ever drop it and risk losing what you're slowly putting back together with caution. And of course, the ending, is beautiful. Very lovely poem, Robert. I love it! |
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Now THIS is a poem of hope right here, ladies and gentlemen! Very nice, Robert. I like it a lot. I "dunno yet" about the title though lol.
Great write. *Bookshevled*
~ Yvy |
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love the title .. :-P
This sa beautiful message. It was so easy to read. it really justblood off the screen to me. I love the feel of it over all. Such a deep sense of poetic device, yet there aren't that many devices in play.. so it is like it is utilizing the devices it is using to its full potential. just aenough, not too much.
I love it :-)
maybe you can go all dickensin on our @sses and use the first line as the title ;) |
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