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YeOldeFart
Dennis Newman
United States, OR, Springfield

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Reef Madness

Lying at the bottom of the coral reef a Sea Cucumber breathed in, expanding its bulk. A long, slender fish darted out of its anus and began her daily hunt for small crustaceans to feed upon. The silvery little Pearlfish skulked close to the coral formations relying on the almost total invisibility of her transparent body to surprise her prey and to hide from predators.

It was nothing more than a shadow, one shadow in a world of shadows, a vague movement on the sea floor among the fans and branches of the coral forest, but the Pearlfish knew what it was. She eased close, her long body just another shadow, and hovered inches above the opening that she knew harbored a meal. She waited motionless for her chance to strike.

A tiny crab, just half an inch across its shell and no match for the six inch Pearlfish, was hiding under the arm of a coral fan The crab saw the fish lurking above and waited just out of reach.

The Pearlfish, her long slender body rippling like an eel, rose slightly, just above the crab's eye-level, and stopped, motionless and almost invisible.

The crab inched forward, his eyes moving about on their slender stalks searching for the fish. He stopped still protected inside the perimeter of the coral fan, and waited.

The Pearlfish watched, concentrating on his movements. She allowed her head to sink slightly and her tail to rise anticipating a quick surge to take the crab. Her eyes fixed on the colorful little crab as he waited under the protection of the coral arm. She saw the small white tentacles attached to his claws like a cheerleader's pom-pom, but paid no attention.

The crab kept his two large claws poised in front of him, at the ready, as if in a prize fighter's stance, and moved forward. The tentacles waved in the ocean current. A shadow darkened the ambient light as a large fish drifted by overhead. The crab inched a little farther out exposing just enough of its body.

Now!

In a lightning quick motion the Pearlfish struck. Instantly, the crab, Lybia Tessellata, jabbed the Pearlfish in the face, like a pugilist, with his pom-pom of Sea Anemones, thus earning his nickname, Boxer Crab. The poisonous Sea Anemone wrapped its deadly tentacles about the head of the Pearlfish and stung it repeatedly. Within seconds the Pearlfish quivered and died and sank to the ocean floor where the little Boxer Crab and his friend the Sea Anemone began to feast upon her body.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2007-11-30 03:52
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I like this scientific fiction very much. Especially, I wonder how you were able to create a paragraph with the "Now"! Wonderful! You have good ability of obersavation! You are expert on showing a story rather than telling it. Suspense is hanging here and there! Conflict is glittering up and down! Drama is crying forward and backford! But how can I learn a bit?
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-07-09 07:55
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Ya know, your stories are revealing and educational and exciting. There are a number of books for kids (this is not an insult, but a real suggestion ... besides, I love kids) out there. Aim for kids a little older than the CRICKET reading age and I think you could sell easily. I've seen some pretty sophisticated stories in young peoples' publications. Do you do illustration? (Hmmm, your stories have surprise endings ... I wonder if an illustration might give away the end? Not necessarily.) Once you have them published as stand-alone pieces, the citations would be a big argument for having them all published together.
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2007-07-05 23:01
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Oops, BTW, yes, I'm trying to market the five vignettes about unusual animals/unusual habits to certain publishers. No success so far so I'm open to suggestions.
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2007-07-05 22:57
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LOL I'm sure what you're thinking of, my friend, is my obvious reference to an old title dating from 1939 about marijuana "abuse." I thought it rather clever, but I'm probably wrong. It did get your attention though, didn't it?
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-07-05 21:50
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Refer to madness.
Re reef madness.
Hmmm... what am I thinking of?
Nice study. Interesting, twisty sort of tale.
Are you going to put these naturalistic vignettes into a longer work. I seem to remember some very nice books by naturalists in the 50's (I'd mention them by name, but ... wait! Loren Eiseley! "The Big Bone Hunter", and another ... wow! I've only forgotten one of them. Good news: my mind is only half gone!). They were some of my favorite books.
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