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Manda
Amanda Walczesky
United States, South Carolina, Lexington

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Where we Meet

recollection of a quiet night
small pops of light, the fireflies
trick our eyes, make us blink
always too fast to fully see
watered down rum in our glasses
we lingered too long here in the evening heat
could it be a sad scene?
the two of us, unspeaking
humming crickets around our bare feet
the orange moon swollen in a harvest haze
smoky scents of bonfires
the breaths of pines
exhaled into the darkness
you stare far out into the distance
the lunar glow illuminating your skin
my lips part, hesitation
should I dare to speak?
disrupt this shared silence?
the rum has warmed, sweat from the glass
drips onto my thigh
sighing, you turn and smile
the echo of a summer storm
intensifies that look in your eyes

8/23/06

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tcbswan Comment by: tcbswan - 2006-09-09 23:56
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this is just a beautiful piece of writing!!! i'm so impressed by the imagery-- i could smell the bonfires, see the large harvest moon--and recognize the places you speak of...very nice!
Spinnekop Comment by: Spinnekop - 2006-08-31 15:56
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Simply beautiful Amanda. It introduced me to a world and to images I'm not familiar with yet painted so vividly by yourself that I could feel myself looking up and seeing the orange moon. Nicely done.
Comment by: - 2006-08-27 15:56
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Gorgeous visuals and emotion of stillness of silence and complete peace and adoration. I loved this from you it was mysterious and romantic. -Leah
Comment by: - 2006-08-25 22:29
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fantastic imagery here, manda. teri's right - great atmosphere. seems like i've been in this situation so many times. this definitely brings on the nostalgia of those hot southern nights. great stuff.
Comment by: - 2006-08-25 19:34
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A poem full of warmth and emotion is one I enjoy very much. You speak of your feelings here and describe these images in detail so I can feel the drip of water and smell the bonfires. This is very beautiful poetry.

Enrique
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