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Rae
Tawny Christine
United States, South Carolina

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Stormy Seaside Goodbye

Should I tie my swords along my back
and prepare for battle,
as all good soldiers do?
should I stake my claim,
dig my heels down deep,
and make way for the start
as all hell breaks loose?

am I made of the steel
needed to withhold such a force?
in the face of the pressure,
should I fold?
become malleable,
and made to bend?
seek acceptance,
with a soul
that doesn't want to give such right now?

or, should I pull up my anchor
and leave this spot?
sail my ship away
to another destination?
set my sails,
of skull and crossbones
and become one with the sea,
as I stay with my ship,
float along with my ship...
go down with my ship.

well, if my sails soon choose
to reach to the ocean deep,
then my sword will go with,
for the dreary sleep.

8.27.06

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Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-09-04 09:32
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Sounds like the every moment existentialist dilemma. Hamlet tearing his mental hair. I like the images which are fresh to this inner conflict.
HiddenLie Comment by: HiddenLie - 2007-04-24 01:33
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i really really like the imagery without saying it.. u dont find that too often..
prolificsantu Comment by: prolificsantu - 2007-03-09 22:49
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should I pull up my anchor
and leave this spot?
sail my ship away
to another destination?
Are there any alternatives of life? No don't leave this spot, you may not find another destination, familiar and challenging. The happiness of struggle is the acme.
tessae Comment by: tessae - 2007-02-27 19:24
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I must first say that I'm not good at understanding poetry written by other people (despite writing a lot of poetry), but as with your other poem I like the images this brings to mind. I also like the conflict in the character, the choice that needs to be made.
Comment by: - 2007-02-18 16:10
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powerfully written. it well expresses the mental struggles of a soldier... descriptive and vivid imagery complete the effect. nicely done.
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