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Dave Morrison
Dave Morrison
United States, Maine, Camden

My Bookshop
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Dog

I watched the dog kicking at
his belly, as if trying to
tear open his own underside,
set something free.
I wanted to help him,
to ease his pain, but
he snapped and howled and
wouldn't let me near him.
It was as if he had swallowed a
bucket of
seeds that were
shooting out tendrils in his
gut, threatening to explode him, and the
only way to survive was
to tear himself
open.




Been there.
Done that.

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Comment by: - 2006-09-01 13:05
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Last two lines sealed the deal..this was a great metaphor and fabulous image. I could see him...scratching, clawing, trying to let it loose. Wonderful poem. -Leah
Comment by: - 2006-08-31 12:08
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I read this and said aloud "let 'er rip" and the thought came that we can midwife a birth (like the dog appears to be laboring with) but not an evolution.
waxseal Comment by: waxseal - 2006-08-31 10:35
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Hey - I like this a lot - very dramtic and I had the image right away - and I like the end except for the 'done that' it's a very t-shirt thing to say - imo it'd have more impact just as - been there.
But again, great stuff!
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