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kyrasdaddy
Robert Cano
United States, TX, San Antonio

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Here With Me

You promised your love
yet still I couldn't trust
I kept my distance
even looked away
turned my back and started walking,
but I couldn't get far...

A part of me wanted, longed
dreams gone returned, shortening my night
respawning hope; a new flame kindled,
ignited...

A soft glow as it burned within,
seen in my eyes
and I couldn't hide what I felt
one day rolled into the next
I waited, expecting pain,
or perhaps a forked tongue's deceitful compliment
but it never came

Your smile was genuine
your love real, but how?
I didn't think love existed anymore
yet time passed, love grew
then I realized the depth of my love...

You got into my heart, breathed life into it
and so it beats once more
Forgive my doubts as I still wonder,
but I look over my shoulder
and there you are, still by my side,
smiling...

What is to come???
This I have no answer for
but what I feel now lifts me up,
makes me fly, and you fly with me
One might want forever,
or at least for the rest of this life
which was given to us
and perhaps for each other

You love me, I still don't know why
You hold me when I cry, or when I fret
comforting me,
sharing life with me,
and showing me, perhaps for the first time in my life...
what it means to truly live,
I know now that I love you
unafraid any longer of the nightmares
that haunted me for so long

So tomorrow when I wake
I'll hold my breath
and when I see you asleep next to me my angel,
I will only watch you,
kiss you on the forehead
and wonder what you're dreaming...

You wake up, look me in the eyes
smile for me,
"I was just dreaming about us," you whisper,
"it was our wedding day, remember?"
"Yes, my love, I do, seems it was only yesterday."
We lay back down, drift off to sleep,
you in my arms...here with me
and we never have to sleep again...

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LadyEgyptia Comment by: LadyEgyptia - 2006-10-13 19:59
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Wow! Lucky girl. Do you have a single older brother who's just like you?
Darra :-)
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-08-31 05:36
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I have read and reread this poem several times now. Who would have ever thought that a woman like me, would be so caught up in it?

Anyway, this is by far the best love poem I have ever read. Brought tears to my eyes, imagining a love like this, being thought of like this. When you said 'I didn't think love existed anymore'....I have to agree with that sentiment. It is hard to believe, but then again, maybe love doesn't exist until you meet the one you're supposed to love? The only person who will love you as deeply as you love them? I don't know.

There are many lovely lines here, but what struck me most, 'Your smile was genuine.' That is something I have always wanted for myself.

So I'm going to stop blabbing now, because I will be here all day explaining why I love this poem so much. Take care, Robert. Thank you for sharing.
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2006-08-30 20:21
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Robert, this is wonderful. I love to see you write with hope and optimism.
Only suggestion: the fourth stanza, I'd break it up after "then I realized the depth of my love..." and I'd get rid of the short line "for you". It's not needed. This would just make the whole thing flow better IMO.
Good write ~ Yvy
jjsmith Comment by: jjsmith - 2006-08-30 19:49
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such a gentle love poem, everyone should have such love

i especially like the line

"I was just dreaming about us," you whisper
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