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Dolphin67
Belinda Celayir
United States, Florida, Fernandina

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"30 Days In The Hole"

In the hole, 30 days 2 go,

One more time, no wrong 2 show.

This, a habit, I must break,

Time like this, so hard 2 take.

Alone, no problem, I can deal,

To take my paper, can't write my feel.

Only read, religious books,

Gave bible study another look.

Have 2 wait, 4 P.O. 2 come,

Once he does, will go home.

Be free at last, just not from rules.

Just this place, and these fools.

07/25/06

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MoganaLeFe Comment by: MoganaLeFe - 2007-06-02 18:30
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kill the Rhymer sweety... let it all out!
You can do it! Want to see you fly!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2007-03-13 19:25
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I am glad I read your bio before I read any of your work.
I do not think anyone will understand if they do not read your bio...

That said, I like the message but feel the rhyme seemed a little forced at times.

What I do is read out loud (my own as well as others), and it helps me to see the balance of the piece.

Welcome to Editred, (and Florida).

I look forward to reading more of your work.**
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