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Citric Mutilations
My boyfriend Howard
left me, the coward,
to go back to his wife
and his boring life
with no cheese
how I tried to please
and now I am hurting
my eyes are squirting
tears from this pain
I can't go through it again
I think I've lost the best
so yes, it's time to zest
the side of my head
and then go to bed
make myself feel good
by removing skin like old wood
the blood it will flow
and to the ER I will go
the chickens will wait
as I stroll through the gate
of the local asylum
where the attendants will pile 'em
all the self-cuts and slashes
burn holes and gashes
but I will prevail over all
because I suck up attention like a mall
full of goths and freaks
so don't try to speak
while I zest my skin
after all, I always win
for I am the queen
of the mutilating scene
*zest zest*
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Comment by: jakrebs Online- 2007-06-28 21:03
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The problem with this poem is it is so mundane. I wish I had a dime for every time I've read a poem about a woman who had "zested" her head over a lost love....
Just kidding and quite the contrary. I actually had to go online to figure out what a zester was. So not only was your poem very original and entertaining, it was (for me) educational too.
Great write.
I hope you don't get any citric juice in there, that would sure sting. |
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Comment by: - 2006-12-27 12:37
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| funny stuff, a fun read :) |
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Comment by: - 2006-11-13 04:11
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Even a town of 20 odd residents can be inspirational.
I would be pleased to have this poem Citric Mutilations on my Poetry For Conservation website.
please peruse the Poetry Writing page at
www.stonecatnaturereserves.co.uk
By submitting your poem,
you have a good chance also of being selected for Poem of the Month. This brings guaranteed inclusion in regularly produced poetry booklets sold to raise funds for nature conservation projects.
This is an invitation, though anyone can submit poetry via email from anywhere in the world.
This poem is very good indeed. I like it.
Scott L. Felton. |
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An intriguing poem that comes of naive to begin with, but by the end you realise it was teasing all along.
Cat. X |
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"the chickens will wait
as I stroll through the gate
of the local asylum
where the attendants will pile 'em
all the self-cuts and slashes
burn holes and gashes" -- such majesty! |
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