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Kantar
Dan Goodger
United Kingdom, Devon, Torquay

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Broken

I feel the pain
I feel the shame
When you look at me all I can see in your eyes is blame
You look into mine you see the same
What has happened to us wheres the flame


I am lost I am like some strange crow
I have nothing left to give nothing left to show
I've lost my hope I've lost my flow
I have nothing now I an noting, torn without my flow.......

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Kantar Comment by: Kantar - 2006-10-03 04:11
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O_o First time someone has said well done lol, thanks
Robert Barlow Comment by: Robert Barlow - 2006-09-26 18:11
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Dan, I like the emotional expression in this poem. It comes across with a lot of strength and despair. Well done. --Robert Barlow
Kantar Comment by: Kantar - 2006-09-03 15:31
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Thanks I will bare that in mind and take on board your advise ^_^
jed Comment by: jed - 2006-09-03 13:54
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a good start, advice is to write often and you will improve.. it's the nature of the beast. and read, always good for inspiration.
Kantar Comment by: Kantar - 2006-09-03 09:04
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Not much but it is the first poem I have ever written, please give some feed back I would love any pointers given
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