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the effects of energy and atoms
We are
light rays
tossed back
and
forth between
reflections.
My light reflects
to
my eyes
through the cracked
mirror.
That moment I
rattled on about
Light theory.
Emit light,
which is
reflected back,
and
if not intercepted
by denial (of beauty)
flesh gracefully
arranged exists.
Trying to catch
ourselves in one
reflection.
Caught we thus
become
what light cannot
be.
My light
bounces through
all'¦
So don't attempt
to discover
which is mine.
It was in
the mirror.
Now in the
puddle.
Now in the
television,
the actress trying too hard.
Wait,
I shifted
again.
Into the girl's purse.
Into the man's iris
(I glow from all).
The more you
search, the
more
I refract
into a view you
don't see.
I am my
own
light (if you
were your own,
then this would seep)
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| I love how the third stanza shifts at the end with "if not intercepted / by denial (of beauty) / flesh gracefully / arranged exists." There was a bit of the 'human element' prior to that with your mention of eyes, but the third stanza is where the poem really opens up into something more personal - very well done transition:) |
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Comment by: tessae - 2007-03-02 10:36
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| this is a really cool poem. You seem to have a grasp of your subject matter, which is something a lot of poets I've read don't seem to have. |
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| Well writ with relativity. A very Postmodern feel to it, I dont dig postmodern so much, I do dig fantasy, and using Sciencefor fiction, wait, Science-fiction, or whatever. but this was interesting. |
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Comment by: GrkGrl - 2006-11-17 17:38
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| because of you i'm gonna tear my house apart looking for something similar i wrote about 4 years ago....when i find it.....i'm sending it to you so you can see why it is i'm adding this to my bookshelf..i enjoyed this.....tremendously.....GG |
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Comment by: jakrebs - 2006-09-21 13:37
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| This poem is interesting. Your short "clipped" style (which you seem to have shortened even more for this poem) works particularly well here. I almost felt like an atom or ray of light being bounced back and forth while I read it. Very clever. |
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