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lsjones
Logan Jones
United States, Georgia, Rome

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First Date

Splayed like spent parachutes on the hillside, the
terror of new love mixing with the terror I
employ to make sure she huddles close in
peaceful embraces and playful teasing, with a
hand held for a brief second, a touch
and a spark, and we knew, as our hearts sped up,
now we would not be two lonely drops in a lake
inching to and fro, but a river, connected at
every point, becoming one: true star-cross'd lovers.

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jagainst Comment by: jagainst - 2006-09-15 06:15
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Beautiful expression with a perfect title. I'm always envious when one can write of love without sounding hoaky while I gag up lunch. This is really cool, and not one wasted word or line--no filler. Really dig this one.
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2006-09-05 13:21
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Aw, this makes it even cuter and sweeter and nicer! Lucky girl, that Stephanie. Brilliant, Logan. I'm awe-struck. :)
Spinnekop Comment by: Spinnekop - 2006-09-05 00:59
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Starting with the letters in the first line is impressive, actually doing it upside down on the other end is just, well... am-ma-ma-mazing. Add to that some content that is touching and beautiful and you have a winner. Nice work.
lsjones Comment by: lsjones - 2006-09-04 15:53
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Take a closer look...My girlfriend's name is spelled downward in the first letters and upward in the last...
Comment by: - 2006-09-04 14:28
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This is my kind of poem. :) Yes this can happen in a very short time. You express your feelings very well here. Your poem is very romantic and beautiful. This puts the idea men are not romantic to rest. -E-
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