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MindFrosting
Bon Banks
United States, WA, Bellingham

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Comments: 5

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Outside Cold

Outside cold crispy and crunchy
Must keep moving must be bold

Mud frozen in patterns broken
Appears like brown pudding, but old

Ice on puddles all shattered, all edgy
Moon barren, alone, such lovely cold

Bark bare with leaves down under
Branches clawed clawing a hand, a hold

No sounds here but swish and footfalls
Pulling this sled heavy wooded loads

Snow in boots like cold surprises
Steamy breath as the dragon bold

Crunchy paces to fill the woodshed
Briskly moving till this sunrise golds

Fingers tingle, soul does too
Ah, I do love this outside, cold

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Harris3dgn Comment by: Harris3dgn - 2007-03-29 14:53
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Brrrrr now I need to get a sweater. Nice little poem.
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-03-19 21:00
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Great desciption of the cold . I can feel it. gtreat imagery. I am used to the cold living in Scotland .

Nice work
Comment by: - 2006-09-07 21:12
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I have not had much experience with this cold weather but I will have to become accustomed to it now. Your magnificent poem gives me an idea of what this will be like. I am cold merely reading this! You have done a wonderful job with the details and images here. I have enjoyed this very much.

Enrique
MindFrosting Comment by: MindFrosting - 2006-09-07 20:42
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Thanks so much Teri!
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2006-09-07 20:13
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I really would have appreciated this poem when it was 100 degrees here. :)

Your descriptions sent a chill down my neck. I can feel the cold weather starting to arrive, and as much as I hate it, it does wake you up. You've done an extraordinary job of describing the cold, and I love the dragon reference! Nice, clean work. :)
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