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lsjones
Logan Jones
United States, Georgia, Rome

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Make Believe

She pulled me by the sleeve
in that way little girls tend to do;
I expected a unicorn cloud or
an especially icky bug.
What I got, what she was so
impatiently giggly about, was
a watercolor sunset and a
million and one stars, winking
in the twilight like lightning bugs.
She was sparkling and glowing,
brighter than her luminescent heavens,
so I didn't tell her that her sunset
was the next town's electric sun,
or that most of her oh-so-lovely stars
were just planes.

It's better to make believe, so we stood
and took in the glory of her sky,
both of us knowing that it was real.

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Valerie Comment by: Valerie - 2007-06-13 19:43
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I love this! The form, line breaks, similes and metaphors - perfect.
A great line - "brighter than her luminescent heavens." The entire poem as Teri stated is charming.
justswf2003 Comment by: justswf2003 - 2007-03-29 16:55
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Took me back to the days with Daddy...Beautiful imagery...Somebody's very lucky to have you...Keep writing...
Comment by: - 2007-02-05 08:14
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awesome imagery! i really enjoyed reading this piece. and the message that you send with it is so right on. a little sad, but all true. i also really like the title and how very well it slips into the writing. very, very nice!
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-11-23 08:39
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Really sweet poem.
fredav Comment by: fredav - 2006-09-15 09:01
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aww. this is totally cool. i loved your use of imagery..you had me at the third line. and i gotta agree with my friends..this is full of innocence. something i rarely get to see and read. thanks! this was a refreshing read for me..
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