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lsjones
Logan Jones
United States, Georgia, Rome

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Enlightenment (revision)

I toss a pebble into the sky,
watch the ripples shake the stars
like no scientist or spaceship ever could,
disrupting light that has
for centuries gone undisturbed:
some long since dead, some long since alive,
we just haven't gotten the message;
but we will.

Soon the pebble rests in the silt
of long-dead algae, a fresh body
in an old cemetery, and the waters
once again rest as smooth as the sky.
The moon looks so close, so
tempting in these stagnant heavens,
so I reach out and grab for it,
accomplishing nothing; after all,
the reflection of the moon in the water
is just a reflection.

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fredav Comment by: fredav - 2007-02-05 11:02
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The imagery you used here is stunning. The opening line hooked me to the very end. I can derive so many meanings and interpretations from this piece. I love poems that make me think. This is so going on my bookshelf.

*i'll not go into the meanings i see as it will be an essay on its own. lol.

thank you so much for sharing. glad i popped in on your page. plus, i know im way behind on critiques/comments. apologies.

freda
noneedtofocus Comment by: noneedtofocus - 2006-12-08 10:58
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Your images her are fresh and interesting. I do however think you can cut out half of the words in this poem. You have traces of lyrical ability and solid images. Well done.
xconnie12x Comment by: xconnie12x - 2006-12-06 17:44
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Hi thanks for your comment on my poem. Sorry it took so long to respond, I don't really check this often. I love the ending especially the reptition of the word "reflection"
Great job.
CrackaZach Comment by: CrackaZach - 2006-09-18 12:05
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epic lookz.
InHizImage Comment by: InHizImage - 2006-09-18 08:18
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This has vivid imagery and a tranquility to it. Yet, when I really listen to the words, I see so much more here. Great write. Yvy
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