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In the pool of purification
Now I am here
Through love and faith
I have been able to journey here
I never thought it could be
As a child my imaginations were clear
Until I reached adolescence
But now, they are clear once again
In the pool of purification
A world I now can see in myself
No one to tell me about it
For it is readily in me
A place of immaculate essence
A home of spirit of all that you are
In the pool of purification, my eccentric
Walls have been transcended
I therefore exist as a man
The pool of purification, a true and
Chosen path of a refined life
It is well constructed and never fall
A new life has come,
Let me live it.
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| Nice poem. Its sounds like you've either transcended your mind and have just seen Reality/heaven/god/the self for what it is... you, or are on the path of enlightenment and have just had some great experiences. Congrats on whatever it was and you did a really nice job of sharing and expressing it through this poem. |
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| Once again, a very good poem. This one seemed tighter and definitely more refined. One thing my eye caught, though: In line 19, when you say "It is well constructed and never fall" do you mean "It is well constructed and will never fall"? Other than that, great! |
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Comment by: tweety - 2006-11-02 13:00
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A Very profond way of describing the baptism and the kingdom...
Once again, you have been blessed with such a gift and in return you are blessing other...
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Comment by: mitra - 2006-09-24 00:35
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| Your thoughts are at a different level. Always a lesson leart from reading them. |
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| This flowed beautifully and the words used fit well with the subject matter. Good write. Yvylyn |
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