writing community
Sign In Here | Lost Password | FREE Sign Up
E-mail: Password:
Remember login  
The place for writers:
Upload your writing in minutes, receive peer feedback from other writers, poets, authors, then get your work published out there in the real world.       Learn how other writers are doing it.

 
willowgroveben
Ben Atherton
United States, KY, Berea

Words: 185
Access: Public
Comments: 2

Forward to a friend
Print Version
E-mail this writer E-mail this user 
View Author profile
Add to Readers  




Growing Up

At 10 years old, I sat in VFW's and Legion Posts
breathing smoke by the lung-full
and watching broken old men
pouring cheap drinks
and talking bullshit at
cheap women.

They played the illegal slot machines
threw darts, and hustled pool
and there were plenty of scarred faces
and tattoo-covered limbs.
Occasionally, they would argue some inane point
and two guys would square in the parking lot
but that was rare.

Some of them would stagger home
long before me
and walk out the door to calls of
'Stay out of trouble' and 'Careful, brother'
and I knew that in their houses
there were the same cheap cigarettes
and strong tasteless drinks
and I began to understand
why they came every night to eat the grease
and tell lies, and hit on girls wearing red heels
with too-tight American flag halter-tops

Home away from home
for them and me.
We didn't have cheap cigarettes or strong drinks in my house;
we came to the bar for that
and to be honest
I always though those guys were okay
even then,
when I was young.

Want to comment on this Poetry?
Sign up to Edit Red and you will be able to comment on Poetry and get access to: Upload your own stories and poems, get readers and their feedback, promote your work...
Sign up






[Back to top]
Comments  
MMerlino Comment by: MMerlino - 2007-08-14 14:22
Add to Readers
      
I smell buk.
Comment by: - 2006-10-04 07:02
Add to Readers
      
Right now I'm sitting in Jan Pearce's class, she's talking way to loudly. I know she's not an idiot, but it's hard not to think it. Well, I like this writing of yours. A lot of "visuals". I really like "Stay out of trouble" and "Careful brother". You've got rythm. Ooooh yeah.
Later friend,
Cody
1

Sponsored Ads


By willowgroveben

Featured Writers

Advertising - Terms & Conditions - Short Story Submissions - Contact - Writing Competitions - Writing Links - Book Promotion - Sky-Tribe.com - alanemmins.com
  Member short stories, poems, comments and other contributions are owned by the poster.
Copyright 2003 - 2007 Edit Red I/S