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Ken
Ken Thongudomporn
Singapore

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After he lost his family, bought a tiny apartment on a bad street, went bankrupt, slit his wrist, set his home ablaze, killed his dog, weighted and tied his legs together, and shot himself; Just before he fell over a bridge, into a rapid flowing river

The blood flowed freely from his left temple.
He was able to observe, yet unable to perceive,
to think, or to understand all his eyes saw.



{Now, if you could see through his eyes,
you would see that the vision through his left eye
is blurry and stained red.}

{You would see through these eyes -
That the whole world has turned upside down;
Though if you could feel through his heart,
Everything would - for the first time;
In a long time - finally appear to be perfectly normal.}



He felt no pain. And could feel pain no longer.
Be it from the wound of his wrist, head, or his heart.


{He cannot think.}

{But if he could - he would probably think this...}


Goodbye, Life.
Goodbye, Love.
Goodbye, All.


I'll Miss You.



And I'll see you in Hell.



Oh wait.



You didn't really do anything to me, did you?
Awww, shitzits..
I'll take that back.

Toodles!




{He would probably type a smiley face as well}


=)


{Like that one.}

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irie Comment by: irie - 2007-06-03 19:38
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... I Love It! ...
Such a fantastic title!
zambr000 Comment by: zambr000 - 2007-05-29 04:28
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I absolutely love your title. As I began to read it felt like an abstract structure; one room tied to the next of internal expressions. The colloquial language makes it easy to read and I think I would classify this as a poem rather than a short story. I could've read much much more.
Overall it was like overhearing an interesting conversation on the subway, but then cut by arriving to the station you have to get off at.
Audiogeist Comment by: Audiogeist - 2007-03-27 02:51
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Haahaa! Excellent. The start (and not just because of the huge writing) caught me...i thought it was going to be a morbid ending! I liked the conversational tone. Very good.

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autodepressive Comment by: autodepressive - 2007-02-17 13:24
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that end was just so right! well, you never find out you're a moron before its to lte anyways
JohnnySodoff Comment by: JohnnySodoff - 2006-09-27 13:54
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It's great how this story shifts from one mood to a completely different one in such a short time, all the while being utterly and completely absurd. This is a story about a man who has lost all and wants to die... and it's hilarious.
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