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| Really strong emotions expressed in an even stronger writing. There's a feeling of sorrow mixed with that of inevitable truth. The last line conveyed so very much. It summed up the whole of the poem in such a beautiful way |
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I like it too..
Many emotions were conveyed.. from happiness to tragic loss...
And I love how you have such a direct style but somehow such pretty language..
Well done. |
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Comment by: Dakota - 2007-12-03 15:30
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This is real life to me. An aspect covered and revealed with gentleness and consideration. I love the way 'goofy' jumps out so unexpectantly.
I like that it covers truthful things - like laughter and smiles.
Tender and true. |
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Whew!
Strong.
I usually don't much care for rhyme, but I think you rhyming has some strong redemptive facets.
Incidentally, just because you've experienced only 'all good things ending', this does not make it a law of the universe. Only if you part from the Love Who Walks can you say that. Then it is true only for you.
Have you made that error? I don't think so. A son, for instance, will be carrying a portion of your dreams forward.
This poem IS evocative. |
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| Very good verse. It hit home with me. I have been there. You have a great expression with words. I really liked it. |
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