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Beck
Dan Beck
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Welcome! Break from psychosis, warm your toes by the fire and sleep...

Everyday I waltz
walking in ever decreasing circles
my blood, sweat, and tears
form fluid despair
doing anything but nothing,
confirming my existence.

Coyly prostrated before the sofa
I scream muffled anguish
deep in to the land
beyond the cushion
pressed to my face.

Then return to the mirror
to regard with disdain
the stranger's eyes flushed red
with broken vessels and veins.

I collapse.

Returning in bliss
to the tower in the ocean,
where atop it's structure
I lean over the world
trapped and precariously poised
to jump,
to feel the water and swell
rise around me.
I'll always find you there.

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akabinny Comment by: akabinny - 2008-01-01 18:52
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I can't believe I haven't read this until now. This is beautiful, Dan. I was so enthralled throughout the whole piece, as if, "This is it. This is how I feel." Wonderful.
ramonesgirlxoxo Comment by: ramonesgirlxoxo - 2007-12-28 06:10
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"Then return to the mirror
to regard with disdain
the stranger's eyes flushed red
with broken vessels and veins."

I love it. :)
It's very vivid.
Comment by: - 2007-03-01 14:56
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"Coyly prostrated before the sofa
I scream muffled anguish
deep in to the land
beyond the cushion
pressed to my face."

That really stung me. I could picture the whole scene perfectly. Which is disturbing and comforting in a way.
Comment by: - 2007-02-27 17:18
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How come I didn't notice this earlier? This is probably your best poem. It feels so raw and real that it kinda scares me... which is a great thing for a poem to be able to do.
sunshine Comment by: sunshine - 2007-02-26 13:43
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"distain" should be "disdain"

I really like the transition between the 3rd stanza and the last, a little unconnected but it works. I also really like the end of the last stanza and "Iā??ll always find you there." really adds to the poem. great job.
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